Hi Maddi - I think you need to look again at the role/purpose of your Art Of - visually, it comes off as more of a text-based assignment than an visual one. I think you need to invert that experience - greater emphasis on the images, with the text much more in a supporting role. For example, you could take us closer to some of the details - the telescope, the windmills - consider making your final images 'full bleed' - i.e. so they completely fill the page so we can really look at them. Right now, your pages seem very crammed and I think you could afford to take more time/space in showing your city. I'd also expect to see something in here about Calvino and about his book - if you imagine you're creating this art of for a stranger to the project, then you'll soon see which bits you're Art Of is missing. Someone should be able to come to this Art Of and understand the project completely.
Hi Maddi - I think you need to look again at the role/purpose of your Art Of - visually, it comes off as more of a text-based assignment than an visual one. I think you need to invert that experience - greater emphasis on the images, with the text much more in a supporting role. For example, you could take us closer to some of the details - the telescope, the windmills - consider making your final images 'full bleed' - i.e. so they completely fill the page so we can really look at them. Right now, your pages seem very crammed and I think you could afford to take more time/space in showing your city. I'd also expect to see something in here about Calvino and about his book - if you imagine you're creating this art of for a stranger to the project, then you'll soon see which bits you're Art Of is missing. Someone should be able to come to this Art Of and understand the project completely.
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